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Workshops indexTask A: Understanding active and passive voice
Summary
The correct use of the passive voice is an important feature of scientific writing. This task shows the difference between the active and passive voices and how to use the passive voice in your science writing.
What will I learn?
- To understand active and passive voice
- Why the passive voice is useful in scientific writing
- Not to overuse the passive voice
What are active and passive voices?
In the active voice, the agent of the sentence (which is the thing doing the action) is before the verb.
For example:
- Contaminated stock solution caused the death of the population.
The agent (contaminated stock solution) is before the verb (caused).
- Parasitic worms infected the entire flock.
The agent (parasitic worms) is before the verb (infected).
Activity
What is the agent in the following sentences? Click on the word that is the agent.
In the passive voice, the agent of the sentence is after the verb (and is usually preceded by the word ‘by’).
For example:
- The death of the population was caused by contaminated stock solution.
The agent in this sentence, (contaminated stock solution) is after the verb (caused).�
- The entire flock was infected by parasitic worms.
The agent (parasitic worms) is after the verb (infected).
Activity
What is the agent in the following sentences? Click on the word/s.
In some passive sentences, there is no agent.
For example:
- The cannula was inserted.
This sentence does not refer to the agent – (the person who inserted the cannula). If it were relevant, the agent may have been included at the end of the sentence, for example:
The cannula was inserted by the laboratory technician. - Measurements of sixteen skulls were taken.
This sentence does not refer to the agent – (the person who took the measurements). If it were relevant, the agent may have been included at the end of the sentence, for example:
Measurements of sixteen skulls were taken by the researcher.
Activity
Check your understanding: The following pairs of sentences are expressed in both the active and passive voice. Click on the sentences which are in the active voice.
Why the passive voice is useful in scientific writing
Much scientific writing uses the passive voice because it focuses the reader's attention on the object of an action rather than the agency (or doer) of an action.
For example:
- Contaminated stock solution caused the death of the population.
This sentence, expressed in the active voice, puts the focus on the contaminated stock solution.
- The death of the population was caused by contaminated stock solution.
This sentence, expressed in the passive voice, emphasises the death of the population.
Using the passive voice and the third person is common, particularly in the Method section of scientific reports. Here the required emphasis is on what was done, rather than who did it.
For example:
Passive: The rheostat was added to the circuit.
Active: I added the rheostat to the circuit.
In the second example above, the active voice uses the word ‘I'. In science writing, it is still conventional (if debatable) to avoid using ‘I’ and ‘we’, and this is achieved by using the passive voice.
Activity
Rewrite the following active sentences into the passive voice in the scratchpad provided.
We monitored changes in the soil seed bank over a four year period.
Radiation caused some tissue damage.
The researcher constantly checked the subjects for signs of hypoxaemia.
Don’t overuse the passive voice
Overusing the passive voice can make your writing dull, cumbersome and difficult to read. The active voice usually results in shorter, more direct and more precise sentences and for these reasons should be used where appropriate.
Sometimes, the passive voice is ‘distorted’ by adding redundant verbs. The more redundant words you use to express an idea, the more difficult it is to read your writing.
For example:
Active: Water droplets dispersed the spores.
Passive: The spores were dispersed by water droplets.
Passive: Dispersal of the spores was carried out by the action of water droplets.
Where passive voice is used to avoid using the first person, the sentence can sometimes become cumbersome, ambiguous or indirect.
For example:
Passive, 3rd person: An analysis conducted by the investigator, differed from standard procedure.
Active, 1st person: I conducted an analysis which differed from standard procedure.
Although it is still very common to use the passive voice, in cases such as the example above, the active voice more honestly acknowledges the human researcher behind the science. Also, it often results in shorter, more direct and more precise sentences, which makes its use preferable (Silyn-Roberts, H. (1996). Writing for Science, Auckland, NZ: Addison Wesley Longman).
Activity
Rewrite the following passive sentences into the active voice in the scratchpad provided.
The nutrient composition of crop plants is influenced by light intensity.
Earthquakes can be caused by the sliding of transform faults.
Death of the weeds was brought about by an application of herbicide.
Approval for the experiment was sought by the researchers from the Ethics Committee.
Summary
- The passive voice puts the agent of the sentence after the verb.
- Active and passive voices emphasise different parts of the sentence.
- Adopting the passive voice can avoid using ‘I’ and ‘we’ in sentences.
- Don’t overuse the passive voice, as it can, in some cases, make your writing dull or convoluted.
Remember, good scientific writing is measured against the three criteria of precision, clarity and brevity.
More info
These sites contain information and examples:
- Active and passive voice
- Improving your writing style
- Active and passive voice - AS0 fact sheet